Message to ebay buyer to harsh or to soft?

I was wondering if I could get some advice. I sold my first item on ebay a week ago today and have still not received payment. I sent invoices throughout the week and never heard a thing from the buyer, so I sent a message to the buyer today inquiring his thoughts about when he intended to pay. The message I sent the buyer is below. I was just curious if I need to be more patient or if I don't hear anything do you think I should start non payer process and if I should have worded the message a little different. Any advice would be appreciated, as this was my first sell and I encountered this issue right of the bat.
Hello
I am just inquiring as to when I could expect payment for the card that you purchased. It has been several days since the end of the auction and I have not heard from you. If you need a few days I could give it but I would like to know what your thought process is concerning when you would like to pay for the card. Thank you.
Hello
I am just inquiring as to when I could expect payment for the card that you purchased. It has been several days since the end of the auction and I have not heard from you. If you need a few days I could give it but I would like to know what your thought process is concerning when you would like to pay for the card. Thank you.
Working on the following sets
1980's and 1990's Topps Baseball BBCE FASC - Cello or Wax Boxes
1952 Bowman US Presidents PSA 7 & up
Pro Football Hall of Fame Indianapolis Colts PSA Registry Set
June 9th Cubs full ticket or stubs - 1981 to 2020
Andre Dawson Topps Basic registry PSA 10's
Mark Grace Topps Basic registry PSA 10's
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Working on the following sets
1980's and 1990's Topps Baseball BBCE FASC - Cello or Wax Boxes
1952 Bowman US Presidents PSA 7 & up
Pro Football Hall of Fame Indianapolis Colts PSA Registry Set
June 9th Cubs full ticket or stubs - 1981 to 2020
Andre Dawson Topps Basic registry PSA 10's
Mark Grace Topps Basic registry PSA 10's
After that I wait 10 days and on that 10th day, through ebay I simply ask the buyewr
if he/she still wants the card. I tell them it's no big deal but I'd appreciate an answer as
I'd like to get my FVF back.
Usually that evening I'll get a reply and my money.
<< <i>Honestly, if i have no payment or communication from the buyer after 7 days i just open a case with ebay. For some reason i usually get a payment very soon after.......not looking to be a jerk, just want to be paid or need to relist said item. Most of the time 7 days is very reasonable. >>
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