let me know what you think of my cheesy poem :)

yanyak5

here it is:



CHEESY


Poetry is hard,
It really aint that easy
So heres a poem that I wrote
I know its kinda cheesy

Theres many types of people
that like to eat my cheese,
Many people around the world
Including the Japanese.

My Favorite cheese of all
Is the kind thats in the can
The kind thats made around the world
Including in Japan.

So this is my cheesy poem
That I wrote today
I hope you liked it somehwhat
and put it on Ebay.



lol....can ya tell i have to much time on my hands???

NoDoubt64

Its a pretty good poem but you have no rythm to it.

Vincecarder

Way too much time....

Don't go cutting your ear off and mailing it to someone...

But I'll give you an A for effort...at least your trying to be creative.

Derrick

Your poem was ok coming from an amateur,
I liked it anyway and I'm very sure,
but there's a way to solve your poetic problems,
yes, there's a cure.
Just watch the poetic master rule this rhyme,
they call me the juggernaut of poems...
I'm slicker than slime,
I'm the poetic God in this era...in this time...
You could learn a lot from me if you just listen,
I'm a poetic artist, just watch me glisten...
I'm insistin'...on what I have to say,
Learn from the master, and then there'll come a day...
when you can be like me,
I rise above it all, and call all the shots,
can't you see?

NoDoubt64

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Nice derrick. Your poem was the quintessence of how all poems should be,,,at least the good ones

Derrick

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Nice derrick. Your poem was the quintessence of how all poems should be,,,at least the good ones >>



Thank you, thank you. *takes a bow*

yanyak5

Screw you Derrick....lol.....I thought my poem ryhmed.....you gotta sing it kinda like er whatever.....